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K.J. Knight's avatar

Oh, and I see what you did there with the song choice (I think). At first, I was thrown off because it wasn't the famous version of the song I knew, but when I realized the female artist singing the lyrics allows the impression of Ahunni singing the song to Wraph-el, as she obviously has power over him, I saw the genius. (If I'm wrong, it worked anyway! 😆)

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E.A. Noble's avatar

yes, I wanted a more modernize version of the song. Something that feels new but doesn't lose the quality of the original. IDK. I've been listening to remakes and new renditions of the old classics lately.

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Dori Tunstall's avatar

This chapter was so hot it made me blush.

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E.A. Noble's avatar

That is exactly what I love to hear lol glad you enjoyed it.

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K.J. Knight's avatar

Growing up, my celebrity crush was Toni Braxton. And I swear to you, if that woman were to appear before me, I would commence sweating profusely, and my voice would shoot up two and a half octaves. Even if I managed to get my vocal chords to function, anything I might utter would be best described as gobbledygook.

This chapter was horny, indeed—and I loved every bit of it. I was right there in the moment, to out it politely. But when Ahunni called Wraph-el's name, my thought was, "Ooooh, girl, don't do that. Wouldn't it be crazy if...?"

And he appeared. I'm extremely invested in the gradual discovery/revelation of Ahunni's abilities, and I can't wait to see where they take her—for good or ill. I'm not sure if there's an official name for the type of chapter you said is coming next, but after the heat you just flung our way, I'd call it a cool down. 🧊 🧊 😆

I'm looking forward to the next chapter (I must say, I'm very much enjoying reading thisnin serialized form), but until then, let me go and uh...relieve some tension. 😏

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E.A. Noble's avatar

Toni is STILL fine. Aging like wine. And that VOICE!!!! OMG. Can never get over it. Not in this lifetime or the next. We need to bring back deep rich altos again. I don't think we have one in this generation. And yeah, cool down chapter next. I call them transition chapters, but I don't think I've ever found the real name for it. lol Glad you enjoy this chapter. Honest transparency, I actually find writing smut scenes extremely hard. Like EXTREMELY hard. (No pun intended.) There's one more with these two in future chapters and ugh, I am trying lol. But once we get over the transition chapter, we are cranking up the horror a bit and diving into the underworld.

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K.J. Knight's avatar

Sounds exciting!

I find writing sex scenes difficult as well. The hardest part (seriously, no pun intended) is not rushing through it—unless that's the point of the scene. You did an amazing job, though.

And you're so right about Toni's voice. When she goes low... 🥵

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E.A. Noble's avatar

I like how we have to put (no pun intended) for "hard" sex scenes lol

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K.J. Knight's avatar

Just making sure we're being serious and not going for the obvious limp joke (okay, I totally went for that one).

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Antasha's avatar

I agree with the interest in Ahunni's unfolding abilities!

When she said Wraph-el's name the first time, I thought she would have caught herself, sending the story in a protective/correcting direction. But nooo! She summoned and commanded this creature, eye color changing and all, then called on the moonlight of her ancestor, Sue, to override him.

Ahunni's not the socially awkward innocent I first thought her to be, and the song selection that sounds like a record playing backwards sums it up.

I cannot imagine what will happen next! I think her, "Who, lil' ole me?" act is over. The jig is up, Ahunni! 🤣

AND THEN.... after such a chapter, our dear authoress has the audacity to ask about a crush who *suddenly* appears!? 🤭 I wasn't going to answer at first... but just in case, Lenny Kravitz. He seems like a deeply sensual man, nothing superficial about him.

I'd slowly walk up to him, looking into his eyes with a flirtatious smile and pause for a few seconds when we're breasts to chest to feel the energy between us without touching. Then, I'd kiss him softly below his ear... Unless, of course, nerves kick in. With a gentle chuckle, I'd say "hello" and embrace him {his energy seems grounding to me} then we'd share a sultry kiss that alters oxygen and reality... wandering through the Fields of Joy.

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E.A. Noble's avatar

"Ahunni's not the socially awkward innocent I first thought her to be" you, my friend, have picked up on some subtle things about her character. Which a lot of people surprisingly don't pick up. lol

And Lenny Kravitz! That man is a vampire!!!!!! Because why he still looks so fine with those tight pants and open shirt lol Love him. And I am dying with the description. wandering through the fields of joy. I can imagine it! I'm here for it. Speaking that your celebrity crush "pops" up all of a sudden out of nowhere.

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K.J. Knight's avatar

That last line! Perfection. 🤌🏿

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Antasha's avatar

Thanks ☺️

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